Title: Miles From You
Author: [livejournal.com profile] papered
Fandom: Supernatural
Pairing: None
Rating: G
Word Count: 297 words
Disclaimer: Nothing is mine - just the fic. :)
Summary: Sam's left for Stanford, and Dean can't help but miss his brother.
Notes: Written for the prompt, "too much". Many thanks to [livejournal.com profile] potthead for the betaing - and a pimp to her fic journal, [livejournal.com profile] raconter.



The helplessness came as the long hand ticked on and turned the minutes into hours, only mildly irritating at first, but building up inside him like a time bomb that was just waiting to go off. Nothing he did seemed to reduce the feeling, and no matter how much alcohol he consumed or how loud he cranked up Metallica, the helplessness remained like the itch of an infuriating mosquito bite that wouldn't go away.

It certainly wasn't a feeling he was familiar with, but for once in his life, there was nothing he could do. Overall, Dean decided that everything was too damn passive, and he hated it. He hated how no amount of wishing could transport his annoying little brother, who was currently on a bus to Stanford, to the spot in front of him. He hated the walls for being too glossy and the weather for being so sunny. If looks could harm, the carpet would have holes in it from the sheer intensity of his glaring.


A week passed. Dean found himself sitting around and being unproductive, all the while staring at John's cell phone, waiting for it to ring. And every time it did, he jumped up with a speed and urgency that made his father raise eyebrows. But it was never who Dean hoped for – Caleb, Bobby, Pastor Jim - but nothing at all from his brother.

Seven whole days. One hundred and sixty eight minutes. This was the longest he had been separated from Sam in the last eighteen years.

He felt miserable and powerless, and as much as some part of him wanted to hate Sam for leaving him behind, Dean found that the only thing he really hoped was that his brother didn’t feel as terrible as he did.

Finis.

From: [identity profile] lovetheguys.livejournal.com


Wibble. Sob. You have so captured how Dean must have felt being separated from Sam right after he left for Stanford. Brilliantly! HUGS, Robin

From: [identity profile] kepp0xy.livejournal.com


lovely, Liz! All the descriptions and metaphors/similes are so very Dean!voice. It's great. And by great, I mean very sad, because, well, you know *overuses the comma. the comma cries* fantastic work man. I love it *mems*

From: [identity profile] shanghai-rose.livejournal.com


Wow, I really liked this - the first few lines totally grabbed me, and I love how you created this entirely urgent, helpless, hopeless feeling. It's not too melodramatic, which suits Dean really well, imo. My only problem, and it may just be me, was that I was so totally captured by the first two paragraphs... yet the last few felt a little anti-climatic. Not that it wasn't good, but it felt like you made this transition to be being so in the moment to something really general and wide a little too sharply. Once again, it may just be me. But overall, I felt like this was really great, and I like the final line very much ♥

From: [identity profile] layne67.livejournal.com


Dean found that the only thing he really hoped was that his brother didn’t feel as terrible as he did.</>

That's Dean for you, always thinking of his brother first *sniffles*

From: [identity profile] lady-macbeth-13.livejournal.com


Oh Dean.

Thanks for giving us a glimpse at a side of Dean he doesn't let anyone see.

From: [identity profile] atlanticise.livejournal.com


He jumps up at mundane phonecalls! That is so sad and pathetic I want to squish him.
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